I can write in third person and in past tense.
I can add adverbials for cohesion.
Using the features we have learnt (fronted adverbials, relative clauses, speech etc.) can you re-write the events that happen within the factory? It has to be written in the past tense and in 3rd person. Can you also add in adverbials to help it flow?
Adverbials = tells you how, when, where and how often something is done. E.g. Quickly, Maisie grabbed her pen and excitedly started writing. Excitedly explains how Maisie had picked up her pen.