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LO: I can edit my work and ensure that I have included the features we have learnt.


Using the piece you wrote last week, go through and edit it. Change boring words for exciting one. E.g. Said - exclaimed. Whilst you're editing, underline each feature with a colour.


For example:


Adverbials Adjectives Relative Clauses

The five lucky golden ticket winners were hurried into a long, narrow corridor, which would eventually lead to the chocolate room, by Willy Wonka.


Suddenly, with a tone of voice that scared the life out of Charlie, Veruca shouted “what’s that silly thing at the end?!”


“Why my dear,” Wonka exclaimed, “patience.”